Shane Sells and I tried something different in the way of writing. I often talk to Shane via Skype and I suggested that we pick a topic (for a poem), and we would write alternate lines. The topic was picked and away we wrote some twenty odd lines of poetry.
Here is the poem.
Melting Snow by Paul Howlett and Shane Sells (original)
SPRING IS ON THE BREEZE
LAST OF WINTER'S FREEZE
COMING SOON THE GRASS
FUN TO MOW
TOO SHORT TO HOE
HEY NO MORE SNOW
MOIST GROUND APPEARS
BASEMENTS ARE FLOODED
BROWN ALL AROUND
LOTS OF BARE GROUND
NO BUDDING YET
BIRDS TWEET IN THE TREES
THINKING OF THE BUMBLE BEES
GETTING DOWN ON MY KNEES
SO THANKFUL FOR MORE SUN
TREES SOON IN BLOOM
TIME TO LEAVE THIS STUFFY ROOM
GET SOME FRESH AIR
WHILE THE WEATHER IS FAIR
LOTS OF WALKS IN THE PARK
NO MORE COLD & DARK
WATCH OUT FOR THE DOGS THAT BARK
THE SNOW HAS LEFT WITHOUT A MARK
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Then I used the old David Bowie “paper and scissors” method of cutting up the poem and rearranging the lines to see if another edit or version would look. I subsequently rearranged the original into two successive edits. I like the result and so does Shane.
Melting Snow by Paul Howlett and Shane Sells ( Edit No 1)
GET SOME FRESH AIR
WHILE THE WEATHER IS FAIR
LAST OF WINTER’S FREEZE
NO MORE COLD AND DARK
THE SNOW HAS LEFT WITHOUT A MARK
MOIST GROUND APPEARS
HEY NO MORE SNOW
BROWN ALL AROUND
COMING SOON THE GRASS
TREES SOON IN BLOOM
NO BUDDING YET
SPRING IS ON THE BREEZE
LOTS OF WALKS IN THE PARK
BIRDS TWEET IN THE TREES
SO THANKFULL FOR MORE SUN
GETTING DOWN ON MY KNEES
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Melting Snow by Paul Howlett and Shane Sells (Edit No 2)
GETTING DOWN ON MY KNEES
LOTS OF BARE GROUND
WHILE THE WEATHER IS FINE
HEY NO MORE SNOW
BASEMENTS ARE FLOODED
LAST OF WINTER’S FREEZE
TIME TO LEAVE THIS STUFFY ROOM
WATCH OUT FOR DOGS THAT BARK
GET SOME FRESH AIR
LOTS OF WALKS IN THE PARK
THINKING OF THE BUMBLE BEES
TREES SOON IN BLOOM
SO THANKFUL FOR MORE SUN
NO MORE COLD AND DARK
BIRDS TWEET IN THE TREES
COMING SOON THE GRASS
FUN TO MOW
SPRING IS ON THE BREEZE
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